Sandra's Writers Workshop Hop
The “Formal” First Person Perspective
Walking around the neighborhood, as I do
every morning, I drink in the meticulously tended gardens. The purple and pink petunias are especially
fragrant this year. The day and tiger
lilies are in full bloom. I especially
keep an eye on a neighbors hydrangea.
Her hydrangea produces prolific blue flowers. I have two bushes and have yet to get a blossom
much less flowers to cut. I muse over
what might be her secret. I hypothecate that
the secret is the plants location and amount of sunlight it receives.
Trudging along I drink in the aroma of the
beech nut blossoms. The street is lined
with these wonderfully smelling trees.
Tapping my pocket, I am relieved.
The great gasping for air, yanking of the handkerchief, I begin the
sneezing bout allergies demand.
This is lovely! And yes, a good example of the formal first person pt of view. I especially like how patiently it is written; with so many tangible details of all the different kinds of fauna, of flowers. That tangible of details is what gives this such great immediacy – the reader is fully in the moment.
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ReplyDeleteLove the details and the imagery--mmmm, what a beautiful walk! I didn't see that twist at the end coming, either; the bad part of being surrounded by all that beauty, sigh.
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